Cold And Broken Halleluja

This was well written. Always listen to the urge. It gets to write it, and then us random people on YWS can help you edit it to it's greatest potential. ...

I highly recomend you read these books if you haven't already. The beginning of the first is a little confusing, but it quickly gets interesting. Just hang in there! I ...

My name is Dmitri and I'm still wondering why my name is Russian when I so clearly live in... what state do I live in, again?

I also had the same idea. Although, it seems hard to pull off, doesn't it? Enchantress from the Stars by Sylvia Engdahl is a great example of a book which ...

Whenever I need some practice into some things or ways I don't usually write, I find some writing prompts. This site: is a good one.

Yeah, the Harry Potter books were good. But, I'm looking for something in first person. Thanks, though. ^^

I've been trying so hard to write a story from a guy's point of view. Bottom line: My writing becomes worse than it already is. I was wondering, has anyone ...

I think the ending was really nice. You shouldn't change it. And yes, It had a bit of a cliche feel to it... but I think you added some originality, ...

I was a little bit hard to understand... but I think you were comparing him or his personality to a car/driver that was out of control? Sort of? That's my ...

"...Take a break, mull it over, but don't tell any of your bloody friends 'till you're desperate or else they'll influence your descicion." --Sora Thompson, Lookout. "When in doubt, simply ...

He spoke the words with collected grace, while the tone caused my heart to race. The sound, of which, he could surely hear, since the beat sped up, in hand ...

You're from Minnesota? That makes you cool already, no questions asked :) Yes, I'm from there, too, but then my parents made me move to Florida... but that's another story. ...

I've been obsessed with that movie for almost forever, and now I'm really into these books. Personally, I think that Airborn and Skybreaker would make really great movies. But, only ...

Personally, I thought these books were wonderfull. Although, my mother is more obsessed with them than I am... ^^ Stephenie Meyer must have done her homework, since the 'vampire myth' ...

Very good -I love the 'cranberry splashes' part. I'd have to say it's real descriptive. Lovely! ^.^